A few weeks ago, I went to the museum saw this sculpture and I thought it was ‘wack’! So when I put it in my work, Mr Fairy gave me a redo so I have to do it again in detention du du daah! Then when I got home, Mum said Jemma no more detentions, so I wonder Jane must have told her. So I went to Jane’s room and she was spraying some stuff then it got in my eyes. “aaaah” I screamed, Mum came up and said what on earth, stop spraying that she said she got the eye drops then suddenly I could see again.
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Good effort Daniella, well done for including the prompt. Try and plan you writing so your stories have a beginning, middle and end which are all connected. Keep up the good work 🙂
Started well with your punctuation but a rather long sentence at the end. Love your use of language though – wack and du du dah are very expressive!